Redesign Of Advertisement Reflection

Going into this essay I felt as if writing a 6 page paper would be a little difficult, with adding enough information. While looking in a Cosmo Girl magazine I saw an ad for Hydroxycut and thought this would be a good advertisement to redesign. This ad is very interesting when it comes to men and women with weight loss. There was no need to sketch out the redesign, all I had to do was put it in a male's perspective. The only challenges I had with this paper was making this essay longer and adding as much details as possible. I basically gave all my all and told every detail possible of the redesign. This advertisement gave me the advantage to look at advertisements and figure out how people view them and if they're false or not. The learning outcomes I walked away with are determining how ads with people affects them. The concept of this gives me insight of how advertisements impact our lives and what we take from it. If I were to get a second chance at writing this essay I would possibly choose a different ad that wouldn't be just the redesign of the opposite sex.

Literacy Narrative Process Memo

Khadijah El-Amin

Professor Lauren Rinke

Writing 150

October 12, 2012

Literacy Narrative Process Memo

 

As I sat down in class to begin my timeline, the most logical place for me to start was age one. At that age I was in the beginning stage of becoming literate. Remembering the small details was not hard in my case because at that age it’s the basic age and the beginning age of your life. Not much detail for just one year in the life stage. I just know that I began to pick up simple words and knew what certain things were. My parents made it their job to help me become literate. One thing I found interesting about my literacy development in my timeline was actually seeing that over time I really improved and progressed in my reading and writing. I never knew this until actually writing it out and seeing my progression. The theme throughout my timeline was reading and focusing on the books that made me like reading even more; which was reading Junie B. Jones books.

Deciding which area to focus on was not hard at all. Reading was my passion growing up. I already knew what to write about automatically. The experience of creating a timeline made me realize that as growing up I grasped things very quickly compared to others my age. I’m a very determined person when it comes to improving on any weak areas and I take that with me to become better than the day before.

            Narrowing down to an area of focus for my written narrative was very simple. Reading was what I like to do best. Ideas that jumped out at me were the small details from my childhood in which helped me become a better reader. When I began to write my narrative I organized it by age in my timeline in which I created. While writing, everything flowed quite easily. I didn’t use any prewriting strategies; the timeline had helped me enough. After composing my rough draft the only thing I changed was adding more details. My partner helped me fix that, there was a lot of room for more details to make my narrative more inviting. This helped me a lot because this is where I struggle in writing and I always overlook it, but in this case I changed it, which made it better.

When I made the final edits to my narrative I had no clue to how I was going to turn my narrative story into a video slideshow. The way I would normally write a story is to just briefly describe as many details as possible. When making a video slideshow you have to edit and pick out the most important details, which can be quite challenging in my opinion.

           My peer review partner chose only eight of my sentences because of the short time limit we had in class. I chose all of them for my slideshow. All the sentences that my peer review partner chose where very good sentences because they were the main concepts. I did find it difficult to edit my text down for a 52-character limit. I wanted to add more information but couldn’t. My strategy was highlighting the best details only that I wanted to share. The images I used was a good way to buffer between my text slides. It gave me the opportunity to add more information, despite the small text limitations.

Choosing the images was very easy. They were images of things I like that has to do with reading. All were personal and from the web, they helped tell my story clearly. Choosing a song was very random; I used one from the website which went well with my overall them. It communicates with my literacy by me being a very determent person. The only thing I wish I could have done differently was to use more of my own personal photos.

Ford 150 (Visual Argument)

The beliefs or ways of thinking in this commercial is to make people believe that this ford truck can do anything. From carrying cargo, holding tools, and transporting trailers. The man represented in the commercial is a hard working man that uses his truck for his manly duties, which shows dependability and manual labor in our society. The intended audience is men who want to buy a truck in which they think will be very beneficial to them. False advertisement is used to appeal the audience so they can go out and get that Ford 150 to make them feel more involved and manly. This commercial clearly doesn't state how much it is, and how huge trucks like that are, and huge trucks like that probably don't run on unleaded gas but premuim. Those facts are not stated because they want to reel men in, in general to go out and buy one. Based on the three types of visual readings my response is that it's reliable to pull men in to buy such efficient trucks. I feel it is the case because most men want a vehicle that is going to help them with their personal lives and on the job too.